"Shine, Shine" is my title and I was messing around a bit here if you would like to comment, please.?

Not a bad subject to think about and try to write about but a lot of your lines seem dated, almost cliched. To me, this is like writing a love poem and competing with the millions of love poems in existence. Unless it is fresh, original, etc., the reader, at least me, will probably just move on. I did like the reference to the 1001 Saints (why the number) and their eyes (blank, fiery, etc.,) That to me would be something to work with.